我忙碌的一家 My Busy Family
There are 5 members in my family, my grandpa, grandma, father, mother and I. We live together very happily, but everyone in our family is very busy every day.
My grandpa not only sends me to school, but also cooks food for us. My grandma does much housework every day. My father is a manager. He gets up very early every morning and goes to work in a hurry after breakfast. My mother is a toy designer. She always does extra work. I do much homework every day and have extra lessons at weekend. I feel very tired. What a busy family! We all want to have a good rest.
点评
本文的命题并无新意，每个同学都能写出关于自家的很多事情，但往往由于可写的东西太多，这里一句那里一句，最终写不出像样的文章来。本篇作文中小作者很聪明地选择了家庭的一个特点——繁忙，然后围绕着繁忙这个主题来描述全家人的活动，所描写的细节也都源于生活，真实可信。于是文章的主题变得鲜明起来，文章的结构也变得紧凑了。由此我们可以得到一个启示，写一篇文章，不是面面俱到就好，而是要抓住一个特点，把这个特点写活、写实，那么你一定会写出一篇好文章的。
重点表达
1．not only sends me to school，but also cooks food for us 不仅要送我上学，而且还要买菜做饭
not only…but also… 不仅……而且……
2．go to work in a hurry after breakfast 匆匆忙忙地吃完早饭就去上班了
in a hurry 匆忙地
3．do extra work 加班