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假设你是李华，近期你校英文报就"科技是否让人际关系更疏远"（Does technology isolate people?）开展征文。请你写一篇议论文，内容包括：
现象描述（如低头族现象）
正方与反方观点
你的看法**
Technology: A Double-Edged Sword for Human ConnectionThe prevalence of smartphones has given rise to "phubbers" — people who ignore companions to scroll through screens. Statistics show 68% of Chinese families have arguments over device addiction. Proponents argue technology bridges distances through social media, enabling real-time global communication. Critics, however, warn that virtual interactions erode empathy, as evidenced by declining face-to-face conversations among teenagers.
From my perspective, technology itself is neutral. The key lies in mindful usage. While sending emojis can’t replace hugging a crying friend, video calls do comfort overseas relatives. Let us strike a balance: power off devices during family dinners, yet embrace tech to maintain bonds beyond geographical limits. Only through conscious effort can we harness technology’s power without losing human touch.
| 基础词汇 | 升级词汇 | 应用解析 |
|---|---|---|
| people | companions/individuals | 避免重复，提升正式度 |
| use | harness/utilize | 强调"有效利用" |
| problem | dilemma/controversy | 体现议题复杂性 |
| important | pivotal/crucial | 强调重要性 |
例句对比：
原句: Technology is important in our life.
升级句: Harnessing technology pivots on maintaining human-centric values.
数据引入式开头：
"Statistics show that..." / "A recent survey reveals..."
作用：快速建立客观性，吸引阅卷老师注意
正反方过渡：
"Proponents argue..., while critics counter that..."
替代表达：Advocates ↔ Skeptics / Supporters ↔ Opponents
强调句式：
"It is through conscious effort that we achieve balance."
变体：What matters is... / Only by... can we...
比喻修辞：
"double-edged sword" / "bridge distances"
高考加分项：用简单比喻提升语言生动性
| 功能 | 实用短语 | 例句应用 |
|---|---|---|
| 对比论证 | whereas, conversely | "Teens prefer texting, whereas elders value in-person chats." |
| 举例论证 | as evidenced by, take...as an example | "Social alienation exists, as evidenced by the 34% rise in loneliness rates." |
| 结论强调 | strike a balance, the key lies in | "Striking a balance requires self-discipline and tech literacy." |
主谓不一致：
错误：Neither social media nor online games is the root cause.
正确：Neither... are... (就近原则)
滥用缩写：
避免：can’t, don’t → 改为cannot, do not
中式英语：
错误：People use phones because want to relax.
正确：People use phones because they want to relax.
结论空洞：
低分句：We should use technology correctly.
升级句：Prioritizing offline interactions while leveraging tech for long-distance bonds constitutes optimal strategy.
句型转换练习：
原句：Technology is useful but has problems.
升级：While technology offers convenience, its unchecked application may jeopardize interpersonal relationships.
论点拓展法：
基础论点：Tech causes family conflicts.
高阶拓展：The pervasive blue glow of screens disrupts family bonding time, fueling emotional distance and perpetuating a cycle of superficial communication.
高考真题迁移：
2023年全国卷"AI利弊"可复用模板： "Just as AI streamlines workflows, it simultaneously sparks debates over human job displacement."
是否每段有明确主题句（Topic Sentence）？
是否避免重复使用think/important等基础词？
是否包含至少3种复合句（定语从句/状语从句/强调句）？
结尾是否有明确建议（suggestion）或呼吁（appeal）？
掌握上述技巧后，建议用"现象-正反分析-辩证结论"结构练习高频考题（如环保、文化传承、青少年压力）。高考写作重在展示语言驾驭力与辩证思维，切记：清晰逻辑 > 华丽辞藻
