In spring, the weather changes a lot.
春天，天气变化很快。
In the morning, when I took bus to school, the weather was breezy and comfortable.
早上，我们坐公车去上学的时候，清风徐徐气候舒适。
I thought it would be a great day.
我觉得会是天气很好的一天。
However, when I got to school, the sky turned to be gray with the gloomy clouds as well as thunder.
然而，当我到学校的时候，天空突然乌云密布，而且开始打雷。
After a little while, it started to rain heavily.
过了一小会，天就开始下大雨了。
I was worried because I didn't take my umbrella.
我很担心因为我没有带伞。
I was afraid that I can't go home after class.
我怕放学后回不了家。
About thirty minutes later, the rain stopped and it was sunny before long.
大约三十分钟过后，雨停了，不久就出太阳了。
The air was so fresh and the sky was clear. This is spring.
空气很清新，天空也很清澈。这就是春天。
Four days ago, I traveled to Dalian with my families.
四天前，我和家人到大连旅游了。
We visited a uncle there.
我们去那拜访了一位叔叔。
During the four days, we visited all the attractions of Dalian City, such as: Golden Pebble Beach, Tiger Beach Ocean Park, Forest Zoo, Xinghai Square and so on.
四天之间，我们参观了大连市所有的景点，比如金石滩，老虎滩海洋公园，森林动物园，星海广场等。
We visited to Bingyu Valley. It's billed as the Little Guilin in southern Liaoning.
我们参观了冰雨峡谷。它有“辽南小桂林”的美称。
But, I liked night view of Dalian most.
但是，我最喜欢的是大连的夜景。
It's very amazing.
它十分令人惊奇。
In the evening, the lights of tall buildings, squares are all tuned on. It's colorful and beautiful.
晚上，高楼和广场的灯都打开，颜色徇丽且美丽。
Besides, the people of Dalian are very friendly.
此外，大连人很友好。
They introduced the attractions when they knew we were visitors.
当他们知道我们是游客的时候，他们给我们介绍景点。
I had a very deep impression on this city.
我对这座城市印象深刻。
I want to travel this city again.
我想再一次到这座城市旅游。
Elephant is the largest animal on land today. It weights some ninety kilograms and is about one metre high when born. When it is 12 years old, it studs over three meters and does not grow any more. Elephant is usually grey in color, having a long trunk with large ivory tusks protruding from each side of its mouth. Usually moving in groups and caring for each other, Elephant is know to be a very and gentle creamre. For many years people have used the strength of these poweful animals to move trees and heavy logs. Elephant has been and is a vital tool for people to do many things that would normally be imposs-ible. Elephant is and will continue to be one of the greatest creatures man has ever come into contact with. Its size. beauty, and power willforever be useful to man.
大象是陆地上最大的动物。它生下来体重约90公斤，身高约1米。到12岁时，象就不再长了，身高3米多。大象通常是灰色的，有长鼻子，大大的象牙从嘴的两侧伸出。大象通常喜欢集体行动，彼此之间相互照顾。众所周知大象是性情温和的动物。很多年来，人们利用大象拖木，举圆木。大象一直是人们做许多事物的重要工具，特别是一些人力不能做的事情。大象过去一直是、将来也会是人们接触过的最大的一种动物。它的庞大、美丽和力量将永远对人类有益。
The new year is coming, it means that I am older, I am not the little girl any more, I must make something different from the old me.
新的一年到来了，这意味着我老了一点，我不再是个小女孩，我必须比以前的我有所作为。
Before, I was so lazy to do the housework, when my mother asked me to do it, I would make some excuses and then ran away.
以前，我很懒于做家务，当妈妈叫我去做的时候，我会找一些借口，然后逃跑。
Now I need to learn to take some responsibility, I should share the housework and relieve my mother's burden.
如今我需要学着去担当责任，我应该分享家务，减轻妈妈的负担。
The new year gives me the new task, I must learn to broaden my vision and gain the knowledge, so that I can make some progress.
新的一年给予我新的任务，我必须开阔眼界，增长知识，这样才能有所进步。
I am so happy that I am older and grow up, I want to become mature and let my parents be proud of me.
我很高兴我变的年长了，也长大了，我想要变得成熟，让父母为我骄傲。
As the cartoon shows, nowadays, many college graduates have low income which is as much as migrant workers[1]. Faced with the phenomenon, we can't help asking ourselves that is it necessary to go to university?[2]
Were I left to make a judgement[3], I would be in agreement with going to college, for if you want to obtain a full life, the experience in college is a part with no subtitude[4]. On the one hand, we can exercise our ability, like cooperation, communication, guidance[5], which will be late to learn after you enter the society[6]. On the other hand, high salary requires both diploma and experience, so it can account for the low income of college graduates who have little work experience. But, college graduates should be aware that they have more potential of promotion, and today's low wage won't be their final altitude of income.
In summary, I want to underline the importance of going to college again[7] and hope that graduates can look the study in college as a development of their life, not only the resort of high salary.
总评：16分. 这篇文章能表现出你在用词和句法结构上的优势。特别是后半部分写的很好。可是我标注出来的7个问题严重影响了得分。请在下次练习时谨记我的叮嘱：一定要顺，一定要保证不错。亮点不要过多追求。不然得不偿失。
修改意见：
[1] 此处有三个不足，第一个是用词"much"，应该用"little"，因为这里我们想说的应该是不多的工资；第二个不足是比较的对象不对。全句应该改成：many college graduates have low income which is as little as migrant workers do. 第三个就是这里句式也得繁琐了，那个定语从句完全不需要。
更好的表述：Many college graduates earn as low salary as migrant workers do.
Many college graduates earn no more than migrant workers do.
[2] 这里你整个句式是ask sb sth. 是由动词ask 接的两个双宾语。那么整个句子怎么会用到问号呢？这里说明对whether 引导的名词性从句的功能不熟悉。
正确的表述：We can't help asking ourselves whether it is necessary to go to a university.
We can't help asking ourselves: is it necessary to go to a university?
特别强调：大家千万不要一想到链接主从分句就想到 that 这个词，在分词分句中（主语从句，表语从句，宾语从句，同位语从句）它后面跟随的都是一个完整的陈述句。
[3] 这是个拼写小错误。改成：judgment. 不熟悉的单词大家自己要关注细节
[4] 代替，代替品，整个词汇是：substitute。记住：后面是三个"t"，没有"d"【5】 这里有三个并列，在后两个之间用"and"。改成：like cooperation, communication and guidance
[6] 这个地方你在写的时候应该就感觉怪怪的。但是你还是坚持写了。因为你想用个非限定性定语从句，所以给这个地方的表达带来很大的挑战。以后一定要注意，没有把握的地方千万不能再考试中冒险。其实你可以退一步。在which 前面用句号结束。后面写：If we can't obtain them until we enter the society, it is certainly too late. 不就很顺畅了。
如果偏要用which，我改：which are the necessary skills with which you are armed before entering the society. 但是在考试的时候你很难有时间去组织这样的句子呢。
[7] 这个地方副词again放在句末很不妥当。读者会混淆这里 again 到底修饰 underline 表示“再强调”呢，还是修饰 going to college 表示“再上大学”。所以应该如下：I want to underline once again the importance of going to college. 这就很清晰：我想再一次强调上大学的重要性。
The balance of nature
大自然的平衡
It is very important for us to keep the balance of nature, and nature often teaches its lessons. Here are twoexamples: Eagles eat chickens. They felt mice as well. The farmers want to kill many eagles to protect their chickens, but to their surprise, more and more mice appeared. A lot of grains were eaten. In one place in th America, the deer eat a kind of wild rose, while the mountain lions eat the deer. People killed many mountainlions to protect the deer. As a result, the deer ate up all the wild roses and began to eat the green leaves and young trees. Now you can see how important is to keep the balance of nature. If we don't keep the balanceof nature,we will suffer from it.
维持大自然的平衡非常重要，大自然总会给我们以教训。下面是两个例子：老鹰吃公鸡。但是它也害怕老鼠。农夫总是想通过猎杀老鹰来保护公鸡，但是让他们惊讶的是，出现了越来越多的老鼠。老鼠吃掉了大量草地。在美国的一个地方，野鹿会吃一种野玫瑰，然而山中的狮子却捕食鹿。人们杀害了大量狮子来保护鹿。结果使得鹿吃掉了所有的野玫瑰，并开始吃野草，以及小树苗。现在你能够明白维持大自然平衡的重要性了吧。如果大自然失去了平衡，我们就会遭殃。
The rate of the traffic accidents has dropped considerably on bridge road in recent years. According to the statistic we have in hand, only six accidents took place in 2000. This accident rate is even lower than that of 1991 when the rate was not increased yet. In 1992, as the nearby road was closed, bridge road began too busy and a lot of accidents followed consequently. To bring down the accident rate, the local government moved the bus stop 100 yards away from where had been and reduced the accidents markedly. In the next four years, the accident rate remained more less at the same level. Then in the years from 1998 onward, the local government put no parking, no right turn and no over taking signs by the road. All these signs have proved to be very effective in reducing the traffic accidents.
最近几年，大桥路的交通事故明显减少。根据我们所掌握的数据，2000年在大桥路发生的事故仅有6起。交通事故率甚至比1991年还要低。1992年，随着附近公路的关闭，大桥路开始忙碌起来，随即发生了许多交通事故。为了减少交通事故率，当地政府把公交站台向外移了100码的距离，因为这里是事故频发地。在未来的四年内，事故率一直保持着减少的态势。从1998年起，当地政府在路口设置了禁止停车，禁止右拐等标识。这些标识在减少交通事故上起到了关键的角色。
High school is an important stage for students before go to college. Everybody implants the idea to their minds that college life will be wonderful, so high school students work so hard to fight for the future college. According to the research, students from middle and high schools were asked the question of what they wanted to know about college. They were so excited to ask whether campus life was free and wonderful, which meant study was not important. All of the responses were so classic, which reflected that college life was misunderstood by the teenagers. College students replied with their experience. They told teenagers that study was much harder and they needed more energy, because nobody would supervise them. It was true that life was much free and how to make use of the part time would decide what kind of person they were.
高中是学生上大学前的重要的阶段。每个人都给他们植入这样的想法，大学生活是美好的，所以高中要努力学习争取未来的大学。据调查，来自初中和高中学生被问到有什么想了解关于大学的时候，他们都非常兴奋地询问大学生活是不是自由和美好的，也就是说学习并不重要。所有的反应都是那么的经典，反映了大学生活被青少年完全误解了。大学生用他们的亲身经历来告诉青少年大学学习更加困难，需要更多的精力，因为没人监督他们。生活是自由些，但是如何利用业余时间将决定自己成为什么样的人。
Nowadays, the price of house has increasing so fast, which brings great pressure to the young generation. Many young people choose to stay in the big cities to fight for their future. Indeed, big cities means more chances to realize their dreams. Young people are full of passion and they need to be given more chances to find their own places. What's more, when you are working with the excellent co-workers, you will know what kind of skills you should be equipped with, thus to get improved. While there also comes with the negative sides. The traffic gets congested during the working hours and the air is polluted badly. In addition, the fast pace of lifestyle makes people easy to lose themselves. In all, living in the big cities is still the main choice for young people, even though they face some challenges.
现在，房价上涨的速度非常快，这给年轻一代带来了很大的压力。许多年轻人选择留在大城市为他们的未来而奋斗。实际上，大城市意味着更多的机会去实现他们的梦想。年轻人充满了激情，他们需要更多的机会去找到自己的价值。更重要的是，当你与优秀的同事合作时，你就会知道自己应该具备什么样的技能，因此去提升自己。然而也有消极的方面。上班时间交通拥挤和空气污染严重。而且，快节奏的生活方式使得人们容易失去自我。总之，尽管他们面临一些挑战，但是生活在大城市仍然是年轻人的主要选择。
It'sa good option for college students to join the army. Army is the importantconstitution in a country. Nowadays, many college students prefer to besoldiers. Why?
参军对于大学生来说是一个很好的选择。军队是一个国家最重要的组成部分。如今，很多大学生都愿意去参军，是什么原因呢？
Firstly, there are many preferentialpolicies for college students to join the army, such as tuition waiver, wagesubsidy. What's more, I consider join the army can strengthen our mind. In myopinion, it's the most important reason to join the army. Whatever you are astudent or others, two years' training can build a strong body, too.
首先，大学生参军有很多优惠政策，如减免学费，工资补贴。更重要的是，我认为参军可以丰富我的想法。在我看来，这是参军最重要的原因，不管你是一名学生或其他人，两年的培训可以练就一个强壮的身体。
I want to join the army. My family isdelighted to my decision. Because I want to be a great and strong woman andchange my images in front of my friends. More importantly, I would like toexperience the army life; I think it will be a colorful moment in my wholelife.
我想参军。我的家人对我的决定感到很高兴。因为我想成为一个伟大而坚强的女人，并且改变我在我朋友面前的形象。更重要的是，我想体验一下军旅生活；我觉得那会是在我的整个人生中丰富多彩的时刻。
Many college students may want to know that can they get a good job in the future only based on a college degree. For this question, I will say no. Actually, a college degree is important evidence which can prove your ability. But people won't judge you in one way, so you need to develop other aspects to make yourself more attractive.
很多大学生可能都想知道只基于大学学位能否得到一份好的工作。对于这个问题，我会说不会。实际上，大学学位只是证明能力的好证据。但是人们不会只从单方面来评价你的，所以你需要发展其他方面的能力使自己更具吸引力。
As college students, they should improve themselves in many aspects like intelligence, emotional intelligence, social communication and physical strength. With the development of this society, companies also want to hire fewer employees to lower costs; people who can be almighty will be welcomed by most employers.
作为大学生，他们应该在各方面提高自己比如：智商，情商，社交和身体锻炼。随着社会的发展，公司也希望雇佣更少的员工来降低成本;那些全能的人是很受雇主欢迎的。
In order to adapt the reality, what college students can do are keeping learning and improving themselves, because they have to accept the challenge which comes from this cruel world and find bright futures.
为了适应现实，大学生能做的就是不断学习和提高自己，因为他们不得不接受来自这个残酷世界的挑战，并找到光明的未来。