教你写_初中英语日记·I Did a Good Deed 我做了一件好事

英语作文    发布时间:2025-03-19  
划词翻译

当英语老师布置这篇作文时,你的表情是不是这样的?? →
       "做好事?扶老奶奶过马路?帮同学捡铅笔?这也太老套了吧!"
       别慌!看完这篇攻略,让你写出让老师眼前一亮的满分日记!


作文高分的三大命门

  • 结构清晰:日期+天气+事件+感受(缺一不可!)

  • 细节到位:至少3个具体动作描写

  • 情感真实:别写"我很开心",要写"为什么开心"


高分局范文拆解

October 12th, Thursday
           On my way home, I noticed an elderly lady struggling with heavy grocery bags. Without hesitation, I offered to help carry them...


学霸拆解台:

亮点词汇struggling(挣扎) / offered(主动提出) / grateful(感激的)
高级结构"Without hesitation"(毫不犹豫) + 直接引语"Let me help you!"


这些雷区千万别踩!

"I am very happy today."
       "Warmth filled my heart when she smiled at me."

"I help granny."
       "I carefully supported her arm while walking."


 让老师加分的魔法句式

  • 环境描写:"The setting sun cast golden light on..."(夕阳洒下金光...)

  • 心理活动:"A voice inside me said..."(内心有个声音说...)

  • 升华主题:"This experience taught me that..."(这次经历让我明白...)


情景演练:帮迷路的外国游客

假设你在公园遇到迷路的英国游客,请补全日记:
       "Seeing the tourist looking at the map ________(困惑地), I ________(主动上前)..."

参考答案:
           "Seeing the tourist looking at the map with confusion, I approached him politely..."