欢迎你来我们学校 Welcome to Our School
If you've never been to our school. —Yi Fu Primary School, let me introduce it to you. It lies in the southwest of Xuhui district. It is one of the best primary schools in this district.
In our school, you can find many interesting places. In the Computer Room, we can have our computer lessons. We can also play computer games and chat with our friends on line. Our school library is on the first floor of our Teaching Building. There are many interesting books in it I can borrow two books from it each time, but I can only keep them for two weeks. There is a pond beside the Multifunction Hall. Many kinds of golden fishes are swimming in it. When you clap your hands, the fishes will swim toward you. What fun it is!
Our school is like a big garden. There are many trees and flowers around the playground. In spring, the flowers begin to grow and trees begin to turn green. You can hear birds singing in the trees, and see butterflies flying here and there.
That is our school. I love my teachers and school very much. Welcome to our school.
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重点表达
1．one of the best primary schools in this area 这个地区最好的学校之一
2．chat with our friends on line 在网上与朋友们聊天
3．on the first floor of our Teaching Building 在教学大楼的一楼
4．You can hear birds singing in the trees，and see butterflies flying here and there. 你可以看见鸟儿在树丛间歌唱，看到蝴蝶到处飞舞。
5．each other 互相