小学英语作文《骄傲的孔雀》攻略

英语作文    发布时间:2025-04-23  
划词翻译

“老师,孔雀只会写beautifulcolorful怎么办?

别担心!今天我们将解锁3大写作法宝
动物主题黄金词汇 | 情节设计技巧 | 范文拆解学习

孔雀专属词库

▎名词篇

  • Feathers(羽毛)
    The peacock spread its feathers like a fan.
    孔雀像扇子一样展开羽毛

  • Crest(冠羽)
    His blue crest shone in the sunlight.
    他的蓝色冠羽在阳光下闪耀

▎形容词篇

  • Majestic(威严的)
    With a majestic pose, he looked down at other birds.
    他以威严的姿态俯视其他鸟儿

  • Boastful(爱炫耀的)
    His boastful laughter echoed in the forest.
    他爱炫耀的笑声在森林回荡

写出精彩故事

Step 1 确定故事内核

好主题 = 骄傲的后果 | 真正的美丽
避免流水账式描写

Step 2 设计对比情节

前期炫耀羽毛 → 嘲笑乌鸦
转折暴雨打湿羽毛 → 无法飞行
结局乌鸦帮助 → 学会谦虚

高分范文示例

基础版(80词)

The peacock thought he was the best. "Look at my glorious feathers!" he said to the crow. One day, rain ruined his feathers. He couldn't fly. The crow helped him. The peacock learned: kindness is true beauty.
【译文】孔雀自认最优秀。他对乌鸦说:"看我华丽的羽毛!"有天雨水毁了他的羽毛,他无法飞行。乌鸦帮助了他。孔雀明白:善良才是真正的美。

进阶版(120词)

Proudly pacing by the lake, Pep the peacock flaunted his emerald train. "My feathers outshine the rainbow!" he boasted to a plain crow. When a sudden storm drenched his splendor, Pep struggled to flap his heavy wings. Surprisingly, the crow offered shelter under her wing. Humbled, Pep whispered: "Your heart has the real sparkle."
【译文】孔雀佩普在湖边骄傲踱步,炫耀翠绿的尾羽。"我的羽毛比彩虹还耀眼!"他向朴素的乌鸦夸口。暴雨突然淋湿他的华美羽毛,佩普拍打沉重的翅膀挣扎。乌鸦竟用翅膀为他遮雨。佩普羞愧低语:"你的心才有真正的光芒。"

常见错误急救站

He very beautiful.
He looked magnificent with shimmering feathers.

The peacock and crow are friend.
The peacock finally became friends with the crow.


试着用今天学的3个魔法
1. 用feathers, crest代替简单词汇
2. 加入boastful, majestic等高级形容词
3. 设计对比式情节转折


扩展练习:
如果孔雀遇到受伤的小鹿会怎么做?试试写个新结局!