I swim once a week, even in winter. It keeps me healthy and I enjoy it very much. And I still remember how I learned to swim.
I was afraid of water. But my mother told me, "You must learn to swim!" When I was 7 years old, my mother took me to the Shanghai Swimming Pool. My first swimming teacher was a young woman. She asked me to put my head into the water, but I would not like to do that. So I wasted the whole day and learned nothing.
Two years later, when I was 9 years old, my mother took me to the Shanghai Swimming Pool again. This time, my swimming teacher was a young man. He was lovely and healthy, just like my elder brother. I liked him. He told me that I must show my courage and couldn't be a coward. I held my breath and put my head into the water. I succeeded.
Now I can swim 3 styles.
点评
在这篇文章中，小作者描写了他前后两次、在不同教练的教导下学习游泳的故事。小作者尝试的是最简单明了的对比写作手法：一次经历一段文章。小作者对过程的描写也是言简意赅，突出重点：孩子的害怕和教练的引导。
重点表达
1．She asked me to put my head into the water, but I would not like to do that. 她叫我把头伸进水里，但是我不愿意那么做。
2．Two years later, when I was 9 years old, my mother took me to Shanghai Swimming Pool again. 两年以后，当我九岁的时候，妈妈又带我到上海游泳馆。
3．He told me that I must show my courage and couldn't be a coward. 他告诉我，我必须表现出勇敢，不能做懦夫。